Vincent Mitchell: A Second Helping…

A month ago I posted a story about a character I created called Vincent Mitchell.  If you missed the story it’s here.

This is the follow-up, where he tells us about his first victim.  A little warning…it is quite gory!! 

For some of you, you may have read this before on TK’n’C just over a year ago.  I’m reposting these stories on here as I have a few follow-up stories to put out there soon and Vincent is the main character in the novel I’m working on.

The photo above is where the killing takes place (the left hand side, beyond the tree line).  It’s not too far from where I grew up… along with a certain crime writer and co-editor of Thrillers, Killers ‘n’ Chillers.  Mr Col Bury.

Hope you enjoy and please let me know what you think.

A Changed Man.

“Hey, Vinny. How you holding up mate?”

“Getting there, Frank, getting there. How’s Mrs Collins?”

“Oh, she’s up and down, literally all bloody night. Bladder’s had it I think and her looks…” Frank laughed to himself.

“Good job she can’t hear you from back there, she’d have your balls on a plate.”

“I’m safe. I think her hearing’s had it as well. That all you want, Vinny?”

“Yes just the gutter-press, as usual.”

“You could have these posted you know. I could put ‘em on young Pete’s round if you want.”

“No, I enjoy the walk down here in the mornings Frank. Gets the old metabolism going and helps clear the mind.”

* * *

Sorry about that, Frank thinks I’m still grieving. The same conversation most morning’s. He’s a good old bloke at heart, but I think he thinks I’m going to do something stupid one day. Little does he really know? Well I promised to tell you about the first one I killed so here it is. It’s a bit gruesome and to this day I don’t know who I was at that moment in time.

* * *

I’d been sent the information via a text message, accompanied by a photo. How was I supposed to know that as I opened the message, checked the information and the photo, that he would be stood next to me at the bar, and he’d seen the photo of himself.

“One eighty five mate,” the bar tender said, placing a pint in front of him.

“Sorry….err, I’ve gotta….err…go,” my target replied.

I looked at him just as he was turning to leave the place. His face registered as I looked back at my phone and then back to him, but I was a fraction too late. He was at the door before I could even move from the bar. I ran towards the door and got there just as one of the fattest women I’d seen in a long time came through it, literally blocking the whole space.


“You’re a bit forward aren’t ya love?” fatty said smiling and revealing quite horrendous teeth.

My heart was pumping, not just from running from the bar to the door by the way, but adrenaline was coursing through my veins and the fact that I had already lost my target was making it work harder than normal.

“Don’t be shy, honey. I could show ya a fing or two. You’d be surprised what the bigger lady can……”

I didn’t let her finish and my politeness had waned. “Look. Your arse is millimetres away from dragging that whole fucking door frame in here with it. Now, I suggest you back the fuck out so I can get past ‘cos I don’t want to be in here when your fat arse causing the fucking place to collapse. MOVE”

Backing out of the door so I could pass she told me what a cheeky, dickless twat I was and I should learn to speak to women with a bit more respect.

I looked up and down the pavement but he was nowhere to be seen.


“Changed ya mind, darlin?” followed by laughter.

“Keep dreaming lady, keep dreaming.”

‘Lost the target,’ was all I put into the text message and pressed the send button. Within seconds I got a reply

‘We know. Don’t worry and calm down. You will receive information promptly.’

True enough, I’d only waited about twenty minutes when I’d received another text message.

‘Barton Swing Bridge.’

I got to my car, which I’d parked at the back of the library, started the engine and headed down Barton Lane towards the bridge. Just before the top of the road I took a sharp left and parked my car behind the King’s Head pub. I sat there taking deep breaths, trying to calm my nerves when my mobile sounded, telling me I had another message.

‘Make your way past the pub, under the bridge and take a left through the gate towards the ship canal. Your target is sat on a bench at the canal side.’

This was it. I wasn’t going to lose him now. As I walked through the gate towards the canal side I could see a figure sat on the bench, leaning forward with his head bowed and shoulders hunched. Daylight was fading and a chill found its way through my jacket and up my spine: fear, or the autumn weather, I’ll never really know. I was about ten feet from the bench and released the knife from my pocket. All my senses were now totally focused on the man sat in front of me. The only noise I could hear was my heart thumping against my breast bone as it worked overtime, pumping blood and adrenaline through my veins. Apart from that, silence dominated the whole scene. I couldn’t hear a thing.

Six feet away: my target hadn’t moved. Four: still no movement. I was two feet away and “snap”, I stood on a twig.

He snapped his head round and looked at me, stunned as he stared at the knife in my trembling hand.

Getting up from the bench he asked, “How the fuck have you found me? What do you want, a…a… and why have you got my picture on your phone?”

“Lower your voice and nothing will happen to you,” I lied.

“What do you want? Why have you got that knife if nothing’s going to happen?”

I looked down at the knife as if I didn’t even know it was there. A confused, almost frightened look settled on my face. I walked towards him, a mixture of emotions spinning round my head. What was I doing? I wasn’t a killer. I was an honest, decent man.

He must have noticed the indecision on my face and took his chance. He rushed at me and, with what must have been total instinct; I blindly thrust the knife at him. His eyes bulged and he grabbed at his neck. Blood ran through his fingers as he tried to stem the flow. I stepped back from him, watching as he fell to his knees.

Tears welled in my eyes. I’d actually done it. This pervert was going to die, and by my hands. Oh shit……….oh shit…………oh shit! What the fuck have I done?

Tom Atherton was a 37 year old paedophile from Sheffield who had been re-homed, with a new identification, to Eccles. He was now on his knees in front of me, clutching at his throat as his sick life pumped out of the wound in his neck. I took a step closer to him and he looked up at me, and to this day I don’t know what came over me, or where it came from, but in a swift movement I pushed the knife into his left eye first and then into his right one. There was a squelch as I pulled it out and Tom made a gurgled attempt at a scream as he grabbed for his ruined eyes.

“That’s for my son, Ben Mitchell. He was taken from me by the likes of you. Four, he was only four and he was taken away…y…y…you b…b…bastard,” I jabbed the knife at his now exposed neck and embedded it up to the handle, just below his Adams’ Apple.

Tom Atherton’s hands fell from his face as he fell forward. As he hit the ground, the knife handle hit the concrete first and the blade came out of the back of his neck. At that point I turned away from him and started walking towards the gate. I was suddenly struggling for breath as I was overcome by what I had just done, and how I could have done it. Salty tears ran from my eyes.
* * *

I now understand that you are prepared to do anything, even murder, for those closest to you, even if they are not here with you. I often think about the others that I have killed and, am I doing right or wrong. I question myself about the morals of my actions, but the image of my son soon invades those thoughts and sends them back to the far recesses of my mind. I suppose there is always going to be a seed of guilt there, but as long as that seed is never ‘fed and watered’, then hopefully a seed is all it will stay.

Well, I’d better go and get myself sorted out, I’m out later on so will be in touch again, soon.





Filed under a changed man, crime, david barber, david barber's fiction world, eccles, vincent mitchell

11 responses to “Vincent Mitchell: A Second Helping…

  1. Fast paced and tough writing, David and very well done. Forgive me if I have the wrong end of the stick but I've read this one before somewhere? Just as good second time around though.Best, Alan.

  2. Yes, Alan, it was on TKnC just over 12 months ago. As Vincent Mitchell is the main character of the novel I'm working on I wanted to introduce him to a few more people who may have missed the story first time around. I've got another few shorts featuring him as well so I'm reposting the ones that have been on TKnC on my blog to get them out there.Thanks though, mate. Good of you to give another read.

  3. Nice and hardboiled. Good one!

  4. Ah, I see and apologies, my old brain cells (what's left) are not what they used to be! Good stuff, David and looking forward to the rest.Best, Alan.

  5. I'm a Vincent virgin, who really enjoyed the first excerpt you posted. I also like this very much. The killing scene was gruesome and I loved it. The part where Vincent steps on the twig was a great touch, exactly when it was needed. Can't wait to read more.

  6. Dave,Weird to read about quaint little Eccles in such a gruesome light (Yeah, right!).You know I'm familiar with Vinnie and support his cause immensively. Can't wait for the next installment.Ps. When I was a school, I pulled the lever in that tower which turned the aquaduct… so there! 🙂

  7. Oh, n yer don't have to call me Mister! Col'll do. 🙂

  8. Paul – Cheers, mate.BB – Thanks a lot, dude!Alan – No worries, mate. Thanks again.Sean – Thanks, mate. Glad you like him. He's been in my head for a long time and its about time he was given a life. Watch this space.Col – As ever, thanks for your comments. I'll be sending something over to TKnC shortly. (I'll be sending Vincent into that tower as well…..old men getting you to pull their lever. Disgusting!! LOL)

  9. Brutal little piece with some light moments. Nice job!

  10. Glenn – Thanks mate. Glad you liked it and thanks for popping over.

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