An Introduction To Vincent Mitchell…

This story first appeared on Thriller, Killers ‘n’Chillers in September last year.  It was my 1st longer story to be published on the Internet and introduced a character called Vincent Mitchell.

Who’s Vincent Mitchell then?  Well, I’ll tell you.  He’s the main character in the novel I’m working on.  He’s someone who’s been stuck in my head for a long time.  He was an honest, hard working husband and father before 2 separate and terrible incidents left him without either.

I’m hoping that the novel doesn’t turn out to be the usual man loses wife and child and goes on a killing spree kind of story, as there is a lot more to the plot than that, but I’m the only person who can make sure that doesn’t happen.  When I’ve got more of an outline written out I’ll post something. 

As with all the stories I write, there is nothing concrete written down beforehand that I follow.  No chapter layouts.  No true plot that I’m following (as yet).  I just find it easier to write that way, although that may not be the correct way to do things.  Hey, I’ve seen people eat spaghetti bolognaise with a knife and fork but I don’t judge them!

Anyway, Retribution is a story I wrote off the cuff but enjoyed writing it. Hope you enjoy reading it…..


A single drop of blood fell from the tip of the knife and onto the pub floor. It’s amazing that in the movies there is blood all over the knife, but in reality there is very little. It’s almost as if the blade gets wiped clean as it’s pulled out. Granted, I mean if you stab a person multiple times then it’s going to be a bloodbath, it will be all over the blade, the floor and probably the walls, but one fatal stab usually leaves your knife quite clean.

Anyway, back to what I have to tell you. There was silence as the victim stared into my eyes, realising what had just happened. The blade had entered his body just below the breast bone in an upward thrust, piercing his heart. It’s funny that as his heart rate went from maybe 80 to zero, mine went from 60 to 120 in just a few seconds. You wouldn’t believe it but killing somebody can actually have a positive affect on your health as, as your adrenaline flows through your body, your heart rate races thus burning calories. I’m not too sure what amount of calories you burn in the few minutes that it takes you to carry out the act and come to terms with what you have just done, but I think it has got to be a fair few.

I’m drifting again.

All of a sudden there was an ear splitting scream that came from my left. My victim must have just still been able to register this, as his eyes went from my face to his right. His head didn’t move and his mouth stayed open in a silent wail. I turned my head and saw the woman he had been standing with staring at us in total disbelief.

“Gordon! Nooooooo! Pleeease God no, not my Gordon,” she wailed. She wasn’t a very attractive woman and maybe in her late twenties but looked older. She was certainly younger than the dying man slowly loosing his grip on my shoulders.

Gordon Wainwright was the man’s name, 58 years old and currently living, not for much longer, in the small village of Bowden, Cheshire. What many people were unaware of was that Gordon Wainwright was not his real name. He was not from the picturesque Cheshire village. He wasn’t even from Cheshire. He was from Blackpool and his real name was Ralph Perkins.

“You bastard!” the woman shrieked as her ‘Gordon’ fell to the floor in a heap. She fell to her knees, rolled him over and cradled his head. His lifeless eyes staring past her and up at the ceiling. If his spirit was waiting for the light to the special place, it was going to be waiting a long time. There was only one place that Ralph Perkins was going and the flames would be licking round his soul soon enough.

“Why? You fucking bastard, why? She cried rocking back and forth. “He’s never done anything to you. We don’t even know you, you murdering bastard!”

I stood looking down on them, motionless and then my eyes scanned around the room of the pub. It was the first time I had even noticed the people in there. On a quick count there were five men and two women plus the two at my feet. Everyone was staring at me open mouthed, fear etched into their faces. A large built man was making his way from behind the bar. I realised he must have been the landlord. He held his hands up in front of him as he approached.

“Take it easy now. Let’s just take it easy. Why don’t you give me the knife and we can call the po…”

I stopped the big man before he could finish his sentence by lifting my knife hand, only to open the right hand side of my jacket. In the inside pocket I took out an envelope and offered it to him.

“You should look at this before you call the police.. It may change your mind.”

“Careful George,” one of the men by the bar said. I looked at him and still holding out the envelope assured the man that it wasn’t George who I was after. Nor was it any of the other people inside the pub.

“I came for one person and he is now lying dead at my feet. I have no other business here,” I told the people looking at me.

George took the envelope from me and stepped back. The woman was still sobbing on the floor next to the now dead Ralph Perkins. I looked down at the woman.

“How long have you known Gordon?” I asked her.

“Not…..long….enough. And…now….you’ve…taken…..him…away…from….me!” she replied between sobs.


“Two…maybe three weeks,” She replied, this time looking up at me. Her mascara had run down her cheeks, her eyes were red and I couldn’t help but think that I was looking down at Alice Cooper.

“How much did he pay you?”

“What?…….How do you kn…..?” her reply was cut short.

“What did he make you wear?” I pushed.


“Answer me NOW!”

“Uniforms,” she blurted, “School uniforms,” tears ran freely down her cheeks.

“What else? What else did the sick fucker make you do?”

“Wrap hand….towels around myself….and make me suck….dummies. Oh god. Pleeease god…..wh…what have I…..”

“How old are you?”

“Tw…twenty…..two,” was her reply.

“Fuckin’ hell,” I sighed, “you need to get yourself sorted out. Keep up what you’re doing and you’re going to end up like Ralphy boy there,” I finished, looking down at the stiffening corpse at my feet. It was then that I noticed blood on my t-shirt between my open jacket and a small pool of it around my left foot.

“Oh….bastard!” I sighed more to myself than anything.


“Shut it! Get up and go, now. Don’t ask questions, don’t turn round. Just go!”

The woman hesitated a moment too long so I bent down and grabbed her under her left arm, lifting her to her feet.

“GO!” I snarled into her ear, “Go home and forget about what has happened here. You’ll understand soon enough. Keep an eye on the TV. You’ll thank me for saving your life. Go,” I finished, pushing her towards the pub entrance.

During this time, George the landlord had been watching the proceedings and not opened the envelope. He stepped in front of the leaving woman.

“I don’t think that is too good an idea. The police will want witnesses so I don’t think anybody should leave,” he offered, putting a hand on her shoulder.

I looked George directly in the eyes. “Open the envelope George and let the woman leave. She won’t say a thing to anybody about this. Neither will anybody else here when they know.”

George reluctantly let the woman leave and then slowly opened the envelope. His eyes darted from side to side as he read the information on the paper. His eyes welled with tears as he finished the first page and started the next. Outside blue lights flashed in the darkness of the night.

“George, George. I need a back door. George….?”

George looked up at me, a tear running down his cheek and falling from his chin. He sniffed and wiped a large hand across his face. He passed the documentation to the man who had warned him earlier and walked towards me, placing a hand on my upper arm.

“This way,” he said, ushering me towards the rear of the pub.

“That’s not the police out there. It’s a special team who will come in, move the body and clean up with no questions asked. They don’t know my identity and I don’t know theirs. It will be like nothing has ever happened” I told him as we walked down a short hallway.

“It doesn’t make it right you know. It’s still murder. Cold blooded murder,” George said opening the back fire door.

“I know George. It’s not right. But it wasn’t right that my four year old boy was taken from me. That too was cold blooded, but he didn’t choose to have his life taken away. The likes of Ralph Perkins chose that for him and there’s still many, many more out there and if I can eradicate as many as is humanly possible while I can, then I can sleep at night. Ralph Perkins served two years of a five year sentence for…”

George cut me short. “I know, I read the document, but…..” he hesitated, “it won’t bring your boy back.”

“No, George, it won’t. But each one I take away from the public, because this fucking government and the do-gooders that are part of won’t, then I can save other children from the same fate as my son. I will meet my son again George, when the time is right but until that time I have to do this. Right or wrong.”

As I finished what I was saying my mobile buzzed in my jeans pocket. I fished it out and looked at the screen, reading the text message.

Chorlton, Manchester. More details to follow.

“Got to go George,” I said and walked out into the night, hearing the door being pulled shut behind me.

* * * *

My locations are set up for me by, well, we’ll not go into that right now. I get my text message and make my way there, and I get the job done within two days. More information is then sent via text once I’m there and I suss out the place and the victim.

Ralph Perkins was my fourth. It gets easier with each one but the first was obviously the hardest thing I’ve done in my life. Only because of my son was I able to carry out the task. I cried for days on and off but then realised that I really hadn’t done anything wrong. I think maybe the tears were for my son more than anything. Maybe one day I’ll tell you about the previous three, I’m sure you’d be interested but at this moment in time I’ve got things to do. I won’t give it two days for this one. I seem to get more of a hunger for it with each one.

I’ll be in touch soon enough with my latest news and maybe fill you in on one of my previous victims, but until then take care..

* * * *

Sorry, I didn’t introduce myself. My name is Vincent Mitchell, father of Ben Mitchell and ex husband of Natalie Mitchell and for advice: there are more legal ways to burn calories.


Hope you enjoyed it.  Let me know what you think.  Good or bad I can take it!  Later!



Filed under crime, david barber, david barber's fiction world, retribution, vincent mitchell

17 responses to “An Introduction To Vincent Mitchell…

  1. Such an angry man, he just needs a little Cthulhu in his heart.

  2. Thanks for reading, Randal. There's more to come from him.

  3. I'm hooked and want more. Great intrigue.

  4. G

    Creepy and nasty. A somewhat amoral individual. A very good read, and if anything, you showed my how to properly write a first person narrative. Thanks for show and tell.

  5. Great story, loved the intrigue.

  6. Great stuff David. Interesting to read you are starting a novel; the very best of luck with it and please keep us posted on your progress.Kind regards.

  7. Dave,I have noticed you have really taken your writing to a new level lately, at least with the stuff I have read. It's great to know you are are taking on a novel length project and you are off to a great start with this one. Great job with the 1st POV as well. Looking forward to reading more.

  8. That was great David!I love how you can give us details (such as the description of the clean knife, burning calories killing etc) without getting bogged down and boring. Sometimes when writers describe things, I lose interest. Not so with you. You keep it light and interesting.I enjoyed this. I think that I will enjoy this characters story. :)((Hugs))Laura

  9. Lily, G, Beach, Alan, Sean & Laura – Thank a lot for looking, reading and leaving your feedback. It's great to know you'd want to read more. I'm chipping away at it, as well as other stuff, so it's a long process. I'll keep you posted. Thanks again!

  10. hmmmmmmm….//All of a sudden there was an ear splitting scream//double hmmmmm //“You bastard!” //again, hmmmmm ////“You bastard!” the woman shriekedAn all right story, for sure, but some of it reminded me too much of my ex-marriage.

  11. Ah, Dave… how lovely to read about my old friend Vincent 'cleansing' a certain section of society. There's enough of 'them' about to get a whole series with this character, so get that keyboard rattling, mate!Top stuff.

  12. Col & Paul – Thanks for the "Northern" encouragement. It's greatly appreciated.

  13. Great job, and Vincent has improved tremendously since the last installment I have read of him.

  14. love the story, David!

  15. Cormac & Desmond – Thanks a lot guys. I have a strong bond with this character, so I'm hoping I can pull something off.

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